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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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maps
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depicts
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 the street access to the city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.It
clear
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 from the maps that there was a huge improvement
for
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in
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 the facilities of the hospital in 2010.
According to
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 what is shown,in 2010 they took advantage of the empty plot
in
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on
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 the western side of the hospital and transformed it
to
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 a bus station.As can be
seen
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 there
was
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were
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tow
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two
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 roundabouts located
in
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on
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 the hospital road and one placed
in
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on
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 the eastern side in order to give
a
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quick access
for
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to
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 the building.
On the other hand
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,they extended the parking spaces so in 2010 there
was
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were
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 specific car
parkings
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parking
 for the staff
as well as
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 the public car
parkings
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parks
 located on the eastern side of the city hospital.
To sum up
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 ,it is clear from the maps that there
was
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 numerous differences between the
tow
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two
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 years in terms of the development of facilities and services.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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