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Computer games are becoming very popular among children of all ages and nationalities. Parents say they are concerned because these games have little educational value and many harmful effects. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many parents feel that
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games
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 have no significant role in education, and would cause deleterious effects on
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, despite
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 massive acceptance among all ages and nationalities. Even though there is a greater truth in
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, I cannot completely agree
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 it. The fundamental reason behind
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 view of parents is because of the fact that many
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games
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 kill a considerable proportion of
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’s valuable time. To be precise, modern
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games
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 have features like virtual reality and group gaming.
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 makes
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 passively involved in them, and soon or later, a sense of addiction develops, when they spend hours and hours
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playing these
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. Another reason behind their criticism is the inappropriate themes of
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games
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. To be clearer,
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games
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 which have racing or violence as their themes are far more popular than
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 like puzzles. Naturally,
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 would encourage
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 towards
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 activities in real life rather than focusing on their academics. Physical problems like obesity and visual problems are
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 seen among those
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 who spend too much time
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playing these
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. I admit that there are good
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games
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 which can enhance the intellectual abilities of
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games
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, Sudoku and chess are some
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 those.
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, the rating of these
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 is far lower when compared to
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 like Pubg.
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, though there are some
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 which boost the intellectual and cognitive capacities of a child, as parents believe, most of the popular
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 are either time-wasting or inappropriate.
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