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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams illustrate how the museum has been renovated within 10 years period from 1998 to 2008. As can be seen from the maps, the most noticeable changes took place in the West section of the building.First of all, there was a shop opened just to the left of the entrance, where in 1998 the temporary exhibition room was situated.
Also
 ,there was a dressing room for bags and coats created in the South-West unit of the hall. The actual temporary exhibition room,
however
, was relocated to the West segment of the structure,replacing the permanent one. Partially, the showroom was converted into a restaurant. It is worth noting, that toilet has been moved to the cafe. The central sector of the museum has
also
 been transformed significantly.There were fountains constructed just in front of the entrance.
Moreover
, there was a sitting area designed in the North-West corner of the garden.
Overall
, the museum has been modernized significantly within a ten-year period, as there were more facilities developed and recreation areas.
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