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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 chart gives information on the
percentage
 of
households
 in owned and rented accommodations in two different countries in England
as well as
 Wales between 1918 and 2011.
According to
 what is shown, the
percentage
 of
households
 in rented
accommodation
 reached a peak
approximately
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 around 77%in 1918.
The
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 following two decades the ratio of
households
 in both sorts of
accommodation
 remained
steadily
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 at
percentage
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the percentage
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 of nearly 31%for the owned
accommodation
 and nearly 68%for the rented
accommodations
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accommodation
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.
In addition
,in 1971 the
percentage
 of
households
 in both types of
accommodation
 remained stable at 50%.The ratio of
households
 in owned
accommodation
 reached the least point around 22%in 1918.
To sum up
,The
percentage
 of
households
 in owned and rented
accommodation
 remained
steadily
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 in 1939,1953 and 1971.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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