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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares consumer behaviours
such
 as buying fresh
coffee
, buying
instant
coffee
 and going to a cafe for
last
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the last
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 4 weeks in
top
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the top
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 five
cities
 across Australia. It can be clearly seen that going to a café was
most
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a most
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 popular activity among the given ones
whereas
 buying fresh
coffe
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coffee
 was
less
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the less
a less
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 desirable habit in all
metropols
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metropolis
metropoles
 in
Avustralia
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Australia
. In Sydney and Melbourne, people
has
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have
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 reacted
similarly
 when the topic comes to
the
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apply
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drinking habits. In both
cities
, going to a café was by far the most
favorable
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favourable
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 event with just under
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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60 % of
population
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the population
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.
Instant
 café have
second
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a second
the second
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 proportion of
resident’s
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residents’
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 selection by around 45 %. Fresh
coffee
consuming
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consumption
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 was
least
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the least
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 chosen one for both
cities
,
by
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with
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 44 % and 42% in Sydney and Melbourne respectively. Brisbane and Adelaide have shown similar figures
of
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for
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 given consumer habits. The only difference
is seemed
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seems
has seemed
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on
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in
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 Adelaide;
instant
cafee
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coffee
 selection took the leadership with
slight
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a slight
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 difference over going to a café by almost a half proportion of citizens. Fresh
coffee
 has selected again the lesser percentage of
peope
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people
 who lives in both
cities
, by just around 35 %. Interestingly, Hobart had the most
instant
coffee
 fans among the given
cities
 by almost 55 % of people’s
decision
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decisions
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, instant, cities, café with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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