Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit making companies. Do you think the disadvantage of private health care outweigh the advantages.

The phenomenon of some companies opening private clinics and charging extremely high fees has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I believe that
health
care
is important to
people
,
however
, private medical service would bring us essential advantages which outweigh its disadvantages. Regarding the disadvantages of private
health
care
, probably the most significant one is that most
people
cannot receive the best treatment. To illustrate, private medical organizations provide the best
health
care
with the newest technology, but a massive fee is
also
required. Most
people
cannot even afford it,
hence
, most patients can only bear the pain from the disease as long as they live. Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I believe that vast income from
the
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private medical services would benefit all humans.
For instance
, medical research
require
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a lot of
equipments
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equipment
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and
talents
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.
Therefore
,
companies
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funding is essential to
the
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medical development.
although
they understand the importance of
health
care
to
human
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, they will no spend any money on any fields that cannot give them a well monetary return.
In other words
, the profit from the medical service is the main reason that medical development growing so fast.
As a result
, more and more diseases have become not deadly. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that most
people
may not able to have the best treatment, but they still can avoid the most serious result from diseases because of the contribution to medical research from those companies.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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