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There have been many inventions in human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important invention is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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this
 perpetually transforming epoch, several inventions
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 human
being
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 to evolve with
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time
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such
 as
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.A fraction of individuals
opine
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 that
internet
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 is the most meaningful innovative thing made by humans.I completely disagree with
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 notions.In the forthcoming
paragraphs
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i
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 have
elobareted
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elaborated
such
 reasons regarding
this
 issue. The first and foremost reason is several inventions
such
 as
telephone
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,wheels,cars,
computer
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computers
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, and the satellite are the most meaningful for humankind.To
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this
, telephones made life so much easy that nowadays every individual uses
it
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 to keep in touch with
other
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 via calling.
computer
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also
 made
ease
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 for the business to do more complex work in just
couple
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 of minutes.
Few
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 decades ago working without
this
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 technological advancements was so much hard for the people of that era.
Furthermore
,
internet
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 is helpful for
the
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individuals but it has some limited uses.To explain
this
,
internet
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 is helpful to book a taxi for a passenger but it can not drive a person to the desired destination.
Also
internet
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 is helpful to search
details
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 about
remides
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remedies
 but it does not cure any patient.
To conclude
,Thre are
plether
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plethora
pleather
 of significant innovation
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suchas
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such as
telephone
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the telephone
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 helps s person to connect with
other person
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another person
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, car
provide
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 transportation
of
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 individuals from one place to another.
like wise
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internet
 is helpful to search
anything
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for anything
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from
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on
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the
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 website but it is not necessary
that
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internet
 can
used
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 as other inventions.
That is
 why
internet
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 is not the most important innovation.
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