Nowadays, some people like to give help to the local community. Other people prefer to give money to national and international organizations. Discuss both methods and give your own opinion on which is better.
Nowadays
people
like to help the local community
and it has proved to become helpful for the pupils who do not have the
basic shelter, Correct article usage
apply
food
to eat. we will Correct word choice
or food
discussing
Change the verb form
discuss
be discussing
about
Remove the preposition
apply
recieveing
the help from Correct your spelling
receiving
local
Add an article
the local
community
and some prefer to give there
money to national and international organisations.
Replace the word
their
To begin
with, there are people
who doesn't
have any basic shelter, Change the verb form
don't
food
and rely on Correct word choice
or food
food
source which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
thrown
in Add a missing verb
are thrown
garbarge
by the Correct your spelling
garbage
community
. They prefer to stay near the side streets, some become mentally retarted for being alone for long
Add an article
a long
period
of time. Fix the agreement mistake
periods
However
, there are some group of community
where they
run old age homes which Correct pronoun usage
that
is
funded by the local Change the verb form
are
community
and the governement
which takes care of old age Correct your spelling
government
people
and people
who lacks
Change the verb form
lack
food
& shelter in there
area.
Replace the word
their
Moreover
, some people
give there
money to Replace the word
their
national
and international Add an article
a national
organisation
where companies like amazon, tech-mahindra, Fix the agreement mistake
organisations
verizon
, Change the capitalization
Verizon
HSBC
run Correct word choice
and HSBC
campaign
to spread the Fix the agreement mistake
campaigns
awarness
about Correct your spelling
awareness
the
helping Correct article usage
apply
the
old age homes and many Correct article usage
apply
other
like that. where employees in Correct pronoun usage
others
there
Correct your spelling
their
company
are asked to give for cause where they can donate some part of there income Fix the agreement mistake
companies
along with
organisations also
give there share the profits of organisation
to the charity. which indirectly help the organisation for getting discount for paying taxes to the government.
In my opinion, it would be very helpful Add an article
the organisation
an organisation
by
Change preposition
for
the
national and international companies to give Correct article usage
apply
for
charity as we can Change preposition
to
recieve
more funds Correct your spelling
receive
compare
to the funding which is given Change the form of the verb
compared
the
Change preposition
to the
community
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