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the graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002

the graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002
#amount #goods #uk
The given line graphs delineate the static of goods which were transported in the UK between 1974 to 2002.
Overall
, despite some
fluctations
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fluctuations
, the indicators of all groups increased dramatically during
this
 period. In 1974, the percentages for water and rail stood at approximately the same, respectively 40
mln
tonnes
 and 38
mln
tonnes
. In spite
of
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, some vacillations were observed in the result of rail from 1978 to 1994, all in all, the indicators of rail
were
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soared around 42
mln
tonnes
. In 1978, the amount of water
was surged
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surged
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about 58
mln
moreover
, the result
was
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plateaued from 1982 to 1994. Despite
of
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a
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the
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 number of water
plunged
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 in 1998, opposed to, the indicator
was
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skyrocketed.
On the other hand
, the
amoung
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amount
 of the road was
apex
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,
in contrast
, the indicator of the pipeline was
nadir
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.
Furthermore
, the
quantity
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 of roads
as well as
 the number of
pipeline
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pipelines
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 oscillated, in conclusion, the pointer of roads rose steadily so an upward trend in the total of roads was visible from 1994 to 2002 roughly 98
mln
tonnes
,
however
, the amount of the pipeline was plateaued around 22
mln
tonnes
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mln, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount
  • transported
  • UK
  • increased
  • significantly
  • 28-year period
  • first decade
  • steady increase
  • significant jump
  • highest point
  • gradual decline
  • minor increase
  • dropped
  • similar level
  • goods
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