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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a lot of
people
 prefer to buy stuffs online insted of going to the shops and because of
this
, there will be a posibillity in the future that all of the shops might close. I personally do not agree with
this
 statment and through
this
 essay I will give my reasons why. Even though buying online has their benefits
such
 as save
people
's time or avoid long qiues on the supermarket, I believe that by doing
this
people
 do not get involve in what they are purchasing,
for example
: if a person has a birthday coming and them are running out of time,
this
 person enters to an online store and selects whatever thing that appears first wether if it is what they are looking for or not.
For
this
 reason is why I do not agree with online purchasing because I think that makes the purchase unpersonal.
However
, I do not believe that
people
 buying online will make shops close because there are a lot of
people
 who are "old fashion", I mean,
people
 who like going to the mall or supermarket and choose the things by themselves: make the action of buying more personal. By saying
this
, what I am trying to say is that there are still
people
 who loves the moment they spend choosing between two differents stuff
instead
 of buying online at home and letting someone else decided for them.
To conclude
, even thought today tecnology has a strong impact in our daily lifes, there are some many things that will not be replaced by an artificial inteligence
such
 as the feeling of enjoy a relaxing moment in the mall or spending time in the supermarket and leave all the stress of the day behind their doors.
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