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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #town #cities
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Nowadays, a lot of
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 prefer to buy stuffs online insted of going to the shops and because of
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, there will be a posibillity in the future that all of the shops might close. I personally do not agree with
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 statment and through
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 essay I will give my reasons why. Even though buying online has their benefits
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 as save
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's time or avoid long qiues on the supermarket, I believe that by doing
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people
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 do not get involve in what they are purchasing,
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: if a person has a birthday coming and them are running out of time,
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 person enters to an online store and selects whatever thing that appears first wether if it is what they are looking for or not.
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 reason is why I do not agree with online purchasing because I think that makes the purchase unpersonal.
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, I do not believe that
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 buying online will make shops close because there are a lot of
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 who are "old fashion", I mean,
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 who like going to the mall or supermarket and choose the things by themselves: make the action of buying more personal. By saying
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, what I am trying to say is that there are still
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 who loves the moment they spend choosing between two differents stuff
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 of buying online at home and letting someone else decided for them.
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, even thought today tecnology has a strong impact in our daily lifes, there are some many things that will not be replaced by an artificial inteligence
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 as the feeling of enjoy a relaxing moment in the mall or spending time in the supermarket and leave all the stress of the day behind their doors.
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