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Some people prefer to spend their lives do you doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however think that change is always a good thing. Discuss boss this views and give your own opinion.

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The importance of spending lives with new
changes
 which were always debatable has now become more controversial with many
people
 claiming that it is horses
while
 others reject
this
 notion. The substantial influence of
this
 trend has sparked controversy over its potential impact in recent years. In my opinion,the latter proposition appears to be more rational.
This
 essay will
further
 elaborate on both sides and does will lead to a logical conclusion. There is a myriad of reasons which will
further
 explain
this
argument
 but the most preponderant one stems from the fact that
changes
 in lifestyle always stand in a good way because it is essential for human beings to update themselves
according to
 society and culture. Another pivotal aspect of
this
argument
 is that many
people
 do not want any
changes
 in their routine, work, eating and so on, which causes them to face a lot of problems.
For instance
, Nowadays children are more addicted to television and mobile
whereas
 they spend several precious hours on games and watching television and suffering from many health issues like gaining weight, reducing eyesight and becoming couch potatoes.
Thus
, if they spend more time on outdoor games rather than playing mobile games they can develop great habits.
On the other hand
, setting good
changes
 always play an important role but totally changing ourselves is not suitable. To explain , many
people
 change their body style
as well as
 their dressing sense by influencing others.
Secondly
,
people
 forget their culture and society by inspiring by social media. To quote an example,
People
 these days want a great position on social networking sites so they make
changes
 in their bodies they get treatments like surgeries.
As a result
, Total
changes
 are harmful but a little bit is beneficial, In conclusion,
According to
 the
argument
 aforementioned
argument
 above individual needs to update themselves as much as is suitable for their body's symptoms.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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