Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Many people think that
children
use
most of their
times
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in
day
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a day
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for mobile phones and
others
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other
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different electronic devices. For several reasons,
this
obviously
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a negative
evolve
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.
Children
spend so much time on
smartphones
so
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that
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they can not spend
times
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time
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on others things.
Variety
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of them
use
moblie
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mobile
phones for entertainment,
that
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which
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is a way for them
relieve
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stress after school, study time,
group
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and group
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assignment
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assignments
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. They
totally
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under pressure when
study
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studying
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in
such
a
mordern
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modern
society which is the reason why they
use
smartphones
is
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as
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a
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the
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fastest method
help
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them out of
their
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. And it will
became
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a habit of repeating daily and cannot live without electronic devices. Another reason why it is
a
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negative impact that
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the use
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use
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uses
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of moblie
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moblie
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mobile
phones will
effect
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affect
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a lot to
children
's health.
Firstly
, it
is
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completely
harms
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to
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their eyes, especially with
children
use
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using
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too much time on
smartphones
.
Sencondly
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Secondly
, it will impair memories and suffer from neurological diseases and many
others
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other
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dangerous
sickness
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.
To
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conclusion,
smartphones
and other electronic vehicles
has
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have
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become
a the
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a
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dilemma
with
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for
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children
today. And
i
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belive
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believe
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that it is dangerous to
children
and obviously a negative development. We should
banned
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to them and find
a particular solutions
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a particular solution
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to
it
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them
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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