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People nowadays prefer to interact online (e.g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In
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 day and age, it is common to use online resources in order to communicate with other
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,personally, I do believe that
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 is happening because of the pandemic of COVID and technological progress.
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 there are discussions about how
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 could affect and what implications it might cause, I consider it to be beneficial and have positive consequences for the future generation. Turning to reasons why
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 habit of talking online become more popular than face-to-face chat, there is a tendency to take on the first place your comfort and safety, especially after the global pandemic
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 start to appreciate their
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 and health even more.
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 not being able to communicate with their friends in real life because of social distancing, they turn to other available options, in order to maintain their relationship with
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, and no surprise it becomes a habit. Zoom meetings and face
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 calls give us both comfort of staying home and socialising, which is why they appeal to numerous
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, especially those who consider themselves to be an introvert.
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, it is worth mentioning that technological progress gives us
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 opportunity, now it become so much easier to speak to a friend who lives abroad or even work meeting
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 you are at home, so it is something natural to happen with
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 flying. There are those who oppose replacing communication in real life with online conversation
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 something beneficial ,
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, I do not agree with that statement. Providing an opportunity for
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 to maintain their relationship despite distances or inconveniences which might happen, already is worth doing
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,
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, it has not so obvious
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 as well.
People
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 become more assertive and start to appreciate the
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 they spend with those who are close to their hearts,
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 that they have a possibility to create even more close connections which hopefully could make both parties happier.
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 I would like to point out that the development of new technologies put
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 in a position where we have new ways of communication,
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 they cannot replace face-to-face chats, they bring the opportunity to communicate in situations where it is not so convenient to meet with somebody in real life, so mainly
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 why it is advantageous for
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 in general.
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