You have discovered a lot of rubbish in a lake near where you live. In the past, the lake had always been clean. Write a letter to the local council. In the letter: · describe the type of rubbish that you saw in the lake · explain where you think the waste has come from · suggest what the council should do about the problem

Dear Sir, My name is Neha Arora. I am writing
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letter to draw your attention towards the area near the
lake
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is full of rubbish these days.
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pond had been rewarded as the "best pool" in the past year, but I was surprised to see
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condition today.
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week, I visited
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basin with my family and got disappointed with the
field
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. The
field
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surrounded by the
lake
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is full of garbage bags, plastic
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and empty cans.
Due to
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this
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, the operation is full of musty and mouldy smells.
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to it, there is some open food throwing here and there, which drives me up the hill.
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, I have seen some people visit
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field
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for relaxation, but they are not bothered about the cleanliness, which results in polluting the pond area.
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, celebrating parties and small functions here is
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one of the major reasons
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rubbish. My take on
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, the government should hire some employees near the
lake
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, who can take care of the
field
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covered by the
lake
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.
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garbage bins are here, there is a need to put
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signs and instructions to aware people not to throw rubbish near the water. Yours
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, Neha

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clarity
Some parts are not very clear. Try to state the problem in clear steps: first what rubbish, then where it comes from, then what the council can do.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Put details in separate blocks so the reader sees the point fast.
language
Grammar and word choice need work. Use simple, common words and exact phrases. Avoid long or strange words.
tone and format
Open with a short aim, then give facts, then end with a request for action.
content
The letter shows a clear push to help the lake and asks for action.
focus
It names types of rubbish and says where it may come from.
tone
Polite tone with a closing.
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