It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Taking
risks
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in our lives. There are some opinions that strongly insist accepting
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a lot of benefits after going through it like me, but there are
also
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risks
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mentality
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in a bad way. I will
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focus on the
advantages
of the issue and explain some disadvantages based on my own perspective and experiences.
First,
we can get valuable lessons from
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risks
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For example
,
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missed the deadline
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my scholarship before and it brought me to realize how managing my schedule regularly is important. As it is seen,
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lost an opportunity, but
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got great value from the case.
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reward is needed in order to have
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mindset.
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some
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to face our fear in peace. If we try to avoid the situation after investing
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big because of the risk we will
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, people can never develop. From
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perspective, there are positive points when we face risky conditions. In opposite, the damage of our mentality after having bad surroundings will be
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so there are low possibility
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the aspect we should solve.
For instance
, some people bet a lot of money
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the fund and
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amount loss of money after that they think it is not simple to recover themselves for
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time. Another negative
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unwelcome results prevent people
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their
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. From my friend's experience, she once failed
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big exam and got
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disappointed
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herself a lot,
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she gave up
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a test once again. Like
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risks
is unhealthy. It is hard to find
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one right answer
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advantages
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of having
risks
jump over the disadvantages. But if we take time enough
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on
advantages
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from
risks
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think the
advantages
exceed the
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disadvantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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