Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it’s only for people who have completed an elementary course. White a letter to the collage. Include: Explain why you are writing; Describe your circumstances; Ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course.

Mr Admissions Man Director of Admissions IT Collage Melbourne, Australia Dear Director of Admissions, Thank you for taking the time to review my application. I know that IT
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selective school and I’m writing to express my interest
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learning a computer
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because I would like to learn the skills about IT and technology for computing. First of all, I don’t have
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completed an elementary
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, but I’m going to work in consulting and I have done the courses about AI and Data Warehouse.
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these skills can help me a lot in everyday life.
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, I have a
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double
degree in business and digital marketing, and I think I’m ready to
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the
course
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. Do you think you can admit me to the computing
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express my desire and my
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enthusiasm
for starting to learn
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mireia
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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