IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#bar #numbers #research #students #six #computer #science #subjects #university #summarise #information #report #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The bar graph given illustrates
Correct article usage
the
show examples
numbers
 of male and female research
students
 studying six computer
science
 subjects at a US university in 2011.
overall
, each category shows several features. First of all, in the case of
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
show examples
, the subject that the
larstest
Correct your spelling
largest
students
Correct quantifier usage
number of students
show examples
 took was natural
science
, the figure was 200
students
, and there are followed by
psychoogy
Correct your spelling
psychology
,
this
rates
Change the determiner
rate
show examples
 was roughly 180. the
subjecft
Correct your spelling
subject
Change preposition
of thalinguistics
show examples
thalinguistics
Correct your spelling
the linguistics
, engineering, programming,
mathematics
Correct word choice
and mathematics
show examples
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
approximatly
Correct your spelling
approximately
 100, 90, 80,
40
Correct word choice
and 40
show examples
students
 respectively. When it comes to male, the
students
 taking psychology, natural
science
 and mathematics was equal, these figures
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 200 student, these are followed by engineering and programming subject. its figure was 150 as same
numbers
. Linguistics was the least number of
studying
Replace the word
studies
show examples
 in computer
science
. In conclusion, the biggest
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
 of
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
show examples
 and
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
show examples
 took psychology,
natural
Correct word choice
and natural
show examples
science
 subjects, but the least
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
 of
female
Fix the agreement mistake
females
show examples
 and
male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
show examples
 took mathematics and linguistics
each
Correct determiner usage
apply
show examples
, it was
diffrent
Correct your spelling
different
each
Change preposition
from each
show examples
 other.
Submitted by ryuhsty on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, students, science with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: