should human adapt to technology or should technology be adapted to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent? Discuss both views and give your point.

Nowadays,
technology
becomes
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in human life. Some
people
say that
technology
could make
human
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humans
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to be more intelligent, but others say the opposite, that
technology
brings
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intellectual
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to be
more weak
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weaker
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. In
this
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I will give
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about
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two views and give examples.
To begin
with, from the first view, we could say that, in order to
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a new
technology
,
people
should
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research for
years
, including
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the
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journals and
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. They
also
have to design the
technology
and test them before
it
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launch
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.
For instance
, the first computer that
invented
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years
ago was as big as a bedroom,
however
, after
scientist
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scientists
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studied for decades, they
finally
can make it smaller
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it is now.
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is
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means they learned a lot to
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something new.
Next,
it forces
people
to
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. As
technology
become
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becomes
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more advance,
people
have to learn how to operate it.
For example
, the electric car that completely different to
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one.
People
who buy it
,
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will learn how to operate it
,
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and explore more what that car could do. It
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shows that
people
will learn something and become more intelligent.
On the other hand
,
technology
also
make
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makes
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us intellectually weaker.
First,
technology
can do anything for
human
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humans
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. 50
years
ago
people
have to do anything manually,
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makes them do and think more.
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, to do
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homework students in
this
era just need to google it and everything would be there. They do not have to read a book or even solve
they
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own math
task
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with formulas, and it could bring
lazyness
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laziness
to them.
Second,
as
human
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humans
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rely more
to
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on
upon
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the
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apply
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technology
, they reduce
the
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their
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thinking in
everday
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everyday
life. Something that they know would be faded by
technology
.
For instance
,
in
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on
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the
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in
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farm
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, the farmers could tell the
rippeness
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ripeness
of the fruit by looking
or
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at or
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touching it
years
ago. But now since they harvesting by high
technology
machine
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machines
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,
young
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generation's
farmer
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farmers
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could not have that ability anymore.
To conclude
, human should adapt to
the
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technology
because it
make
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makes
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they
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them
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more intelligent by
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it and
make
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makes
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them more
ability
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able
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to operate it.
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  • adaptation
  • advantages
  • challenges
  • technological advancements
  • dependency
  • integration
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • convenience
  • communication
  • knowledge
  • skills
  • creativity
  • limitation
  • innovation
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • cognitive abilities
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