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The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart compares the research
students
 learning six subjects in computer science ,depending on their gender in a university in the USA in 2011. Looking from an
overall
 perspective it is readily apparent that male
students
 had more interest in any given subject other than Linguistics,
whereas
 female
students
 dominated in that area.The most followed entity was Natural science among both genders. With regards to Linguistics, more than 100 ladies participated in that
while
 their counterparts showed less interest ,accounting for less than 100.
Although
 in natural science both parties engaged with similar enthusiasm with 200
students
 from each party,other subjects showed differences in selecting the subjects. The maximum gap was seen in Mathematics where 200 males were involved with that
whereas
 only less than 50 females were counted ,showing a huge discrepancy. In Psychology,programming and engineering, girls were outnumbered by boys .Less than 100 females have chosen to engineer when it was 150 for males,
likewise
Add a comma
,likewise
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 programming showed a similar trend,( 150- boys/ less than 100 girls).
Although
 psychology attracted a large number of males , 200
students
,it was just above 150 for females.
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