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In the past, lectures were traditional method of teaching large numbers of students in a classroom. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students.What are advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

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At one point lectures were the conventional means of teaching big groups of
students
,
whereas
 now, with the rise of technology, online education is becoming more widespread. The new method creates opportunities
such
 as adjusting school hours to one’s preference and financial
costs
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 reduction.
Nevertheless
,
students
 are prone to spending much more time on electronics. There are several benefits
students
 can obtain with the increased popularity of online
classes
.
Firstly
 they allow
students
 to reduce their transportation costs. For people who don’t live on campus, getting to
university
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 takes time and money, so the new approach creates convenient conditions for
students
.
Moreover
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 they can spend less money on textbooks and other school materials. Another advantage is the schedule flexibility pupils acquire.
This
 gives
students
 an opportunity to combine their extracurricular activities and work with studies based on their availability. The majority of
students
 use either their tablets or laptops for taking notes. With online
classes
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 they not only have to take notes but
also
 take part in a conference call and follow what the teacher is writing on the whiteboard. That might be a negative aspect of having online
classes
 since
students
 have to constantly switch between a
note taking
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 app and a conference call platform or reduce the screen size of both tabs, which would worsen one’s eyesight. Another drawback of the new approach is the amount of screen time on electronic devices
students
 are subject to.
This
 might cause negative implications to pupils’ health like bad eyesight,
as well as
 back pain or headache.
Overall
, it is agreed that online
classes
 make studying more comfortable for people all around the world.
However
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 it is important to keep your health a priority.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Multimedia content
  • Automated grading
  • Global collaboration
  • Critical thinking
  • Personalized learning
  • Digital divide
  • Interactive software
  • E-learning platforms
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Technological literacy
  • Distance education
  • Digital resources
  • Cybersecurity concerns
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Pedagogical approaches
  • Disruption in education
  • Innovative teaching methods
  • Accessibility features
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