The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrastes
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illustrates
about five
Australia
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Australian
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cities
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cities'
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residets
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residents
drinking habits in three different
way
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ways
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in
last
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the last
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four weeks. As is shown, in the bar chart, the most popular choice
of
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apply
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them
were went
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were going
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to a cafe for
coffee
or tea, all over 55% in four
city
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cities
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, Sydney,
Melboume
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Melbourne
, Brisbane and Hobart .
whereas
Adelaide citizen who went out for
dinrk
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dinner
,49% ,was almost as popular as
who
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those who
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bought instant
coffee
,with 50%,
the
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being the
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most
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apply
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favourite one.
On the other hand
, the second common type of drinking
habits
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habit
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,
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apply
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was
bought
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buying
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instant
coffee
in
last
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the last
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one
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apply
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month. Sydney 45%, Melboume47%, Brisbane 52% and Hobart 54% respectively.
By contrast
,the least favourite was bought fresh
coffee
in all
citiy
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city
cities
, all below 49%.
Overall
, in
last
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the last
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4 weeks
for
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among
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five
Australia
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Australian
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citizen
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citizens
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,
went
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going
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to
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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for
coffee
or tea was their major habit .And the following choice was
bought
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to buy
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instant
coffee
, except for Adelaide
citizen
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citizens
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, both
of
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apply
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two
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the two
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choice
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choices
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were close. The least
favourtie
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favourite
one was
bought
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buying
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fresh
coffee
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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