The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare five categories of
household
expenditure in the
UK
and New
Zealand
in the years 1980 and 2008. It is noticeable that the proportion of spending on food and drink fell in
both
countries over the
28- year
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28-year
period,
while
spending on utility bills rose.
Also
,
UK
residents spent a significantly larger percentage of their
household
budgets on leisure than their New
Zealand
counterparts. In 1980, 29% of
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average New
Zealand
household
budget went on food and drink,
while
the equivalent figure for a
UK
home was 23%. By 2008, expenditure on food and drink had fallen by 4% in New
Zealand
, and by a full 10% in the
UK
.
By contrast
,
both
countries saw an increase in expenditure on utility bills for the average home, from 27% to 31% in New
Zealand
and from 26% to 28% in the
UK
. Leisure activities accounted for the highest proportion of
UK
household
spending in
both
years, but only the third highest proportion in New
Zealand
. In fact, in 2008, New Zealanders spent only half as much in relative terms on recreation (17%) as
UK
residents (34%). In
both
countries, transport costs and other costs took roughly 15% and 10% of
household
budgets respectively.
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