The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture provides
Correct article usage
a figure
figure
about demographic changes in New Zealand over a hundred-year period.
The Fix the agreement mistake
figures
birth
line is higher than the death
line before 2041.
In 1901 birth
rate
is higher than the death
rate
of
about 10%.And Change preposition
by
birth
rate
continue to increase and reach a peak of about 65% in 1961.In the same year, we have the biggest gap of about 40%. In 1981 the birth
rate
go down for one year and recovered next
year. The Correct article usage
the next
birth
rate
only goes down since 2001, and reach
the same in 2041.
the Correct subject-verb agreement
reaches
death
rate
steadily increases before 2001. Since the death
rate
increases faster than before and reach
the highest point at almost 60% in 2061, by Change the verb form
reaches
then
the death
rate
is higher than the birth
rate
of about 15%.Submitted by supervzxx on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "go down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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