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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph shows how New
Zealand
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's
birth
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 and death rates have changed over the two-hundred-year period from 1901 to 2101.
It is clear that
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 in New
Zealand
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 births have exceeded deaths over
this
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 past time.
However
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,
this
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 trend may be reversed in 2041. In 1901, New
Zealand
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's
birth
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rate
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 was around 20/000s, which was more than twice as high as the death
rate
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. 20 years later, there was a noticeable change. The
birth
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rate
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 fell by 5/000s,
while
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 the death
rate
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 saw an increase of a similar magnitude. The
birth
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rate
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 peaked at about 65/000s in approximately 1961, but
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 it
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 shows a significant decline in 1981, at about 15/000s, to 50/000s.
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, the mortality
rate
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, which continued to move higher over the time shown, fluctuated negligibly. The figure for births in New
Zealand
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 fluctuates as well but remains generally higher than the figure for deaths until 2041. After 2041, the number of deaths overtakes the number of births, and the discrepancy between the mortality
rate
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 and the
birth
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rate
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 is likely to be more than 10/000s.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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