Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effect on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Movies
and computer games
that have violence
content are the most favouredReplace the word
violent
Add the comma(s)
, my people,
my
people these days. Many Correct your spelling
by
thinks
that these Change the verb form
think
action
should be prohibited , Replace the word
activities
while
others disagree. This
essay will try to elaborate both
Change preposition
on both
argument
and give Change to a plural noun
arguments
writer's
point of view
First and foremost, there are many kinds of popular Correct article usage
the writer's
movies
and online games
that have violence
content these days, even superhero Replace the word
violent
movies
. For example
, Iron Man, Spiderman, or Free Fire online games
, all of these contains many disturbing scenes. Scenes when the hero fights against the villain for
example, Add the comma(s)
,for
contains
many physical actions, that hurt each other, and if the kids see that, they will think Correct subject-verb agreement
contain
that is
the right way to protect people, while
it is not. There are many other ways, that can be done and not use violence. Moreover
, the scenes are also
full of blood or other injuries, which can make the kids feel traumatic.
On the other hand
, both action movies
and games
have a good story behind it
. It can teach many Correct pronoun usage
them
morale
Correct your spelling
moral
value
to our kids, Change to a plural noun
values
for example
, that we must fight for the weak, and learn to protect ourselves in the future. These values that
become the main point for others, that they Correct pronoun usage
apply
watching
Wrong verb form
watch
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
movie
or Fix the agreement mistake
movies
games
, only for fun and stress relieving. While
watching the highlight
part of the movie, they will feel the adrenalineChange the verb form
highlighted
,
and the emotion. Remove the comma
apply
Furthermore
, they feel that by
watching Change preposition
apply
this
Change the determiner
this movie
these movies
movies
or playing online games
, can help them to release stree
from work, and some activities to do in their leisure time.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
stress
although
so many movies
and games
that
provides many disturbing Correct pronoun usage
apply
scene
, they are just for fun, and not Change to a plural noun
scenes
a
real action that can be applied in our life. Correct article usage
apply
Thats
why, Correct your spelling
That's
Correct article usage
the writer
writer
disagree Fix the agreement mistake
writers
if
those Correct word choice
that
movies
and games
prohibited
from Add a missing verb
are prohibited
the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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