the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person. in the UK, Sweden, Italy, Portugal between 1967 and 2007. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person. in the UK, Sweden, Italy, Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about the average carbon dioxide
emission
per person in four European countries ( UK , Sweden , Italy and Portugal) from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, both the United Kingdom and Sweden showed a downtrend,
Italy
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and Italy
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and Portugal experienced a steady gradual surge over the period of time. In 1967, the UK had the highest
rate
of CO2
emission
( nearly 11) ,
,
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however
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,however
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this
percentage started to decline gradually over the years till it reached around 9 in 2007.
Although
Sweden showed an increase in CO2
emission
rate
from 1967 to 1977 with a value of around 8 to increase to more than 10 in 1977, It experienced a rapid downward decline till it reached its lowest value of approximately in 2007.
On the other hand
, Portugal had the lowest CO2
emission
rate
(less than 2) in 1967. ,
however
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it started to rise gradually over the years till it became around 5 in 2007.
Finally
, Italy had
CO2
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a CO2
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emission
rate
of over 7 in 1967, It spiked and increased to more than 6 in 1977, and
then
it showed a gradual increase in 1997. In 2007, Italy showed a constant no rise in its CO2
emission
rate
less than 8.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 4 times.

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