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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 table depicts the proportions of
journeys
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made
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are made
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 by various sorts of
transportations
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transportation
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 in four nations.It
clear
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is clear
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 from the table that using cars is the highest
rates
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rate
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 in all countries.
According to
 what is shown,the percentages of
journeys
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made by car in Canada,Belgium
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, as well as Germany,
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as well as
 Germany were 90%,72%and 68% respectively.Meanwhile,the ratio of
on foot
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also
 bicycle
journeys
 maintained
stable
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 in Belgium and Germany.
In addition
,considering the bar chart the figures
of
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for
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alternative
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alternatives
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 were
the
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at the
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 highest level in the graph accounting
just
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for just
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 below 40 reasons.
While
,
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apply
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a few
number
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numbers
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 of work nightshift reasons for people who travel by car constituting slight below 10 reasons.
To sum up
,we could say that most
of
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journeys
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the journeys
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 were made by the use of cars in all nations.
However
,the highest rate was in Canada.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words journeys with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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