Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Music
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is one of the most enjoyed
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of
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art. Some
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believe that songs can help with
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integration of different cultures and ages. In
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essay, I will argue that
music
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as a universal language connects
people
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from various parts of the world and
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given the natural appeal of
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it can bring together persons of different ages.
Music
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is a
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entertainment. Even though
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lyrics of songs are of a particular language, it is not crucial to
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understand
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to enjoy
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.
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, the song Gangnam Style
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a Korean artist had success all around the world and almost everyone knew it and could dance to it, despite a majority of listeners did not know what was it about. The global trend of
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melody and
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rhythm
helped with linking
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from various parts of the world and showed that no matter the culture we are all able to enjoy and dance to the same song. Different situations
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specific songs. It is common that young and old
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have
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significantly different
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tastes.
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, I would argue that in some situations personal preferences step aside and everyone
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the same
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.
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, in the later hours of
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the wedding
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party,
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all generations are usually present, it is normal to find kids enjoying
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with their grandparents. The
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usually set a nice atmosphere that allows
people
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to share positive emotions among themselves. In conclusion,
music
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is understood by everyone and produces good vibes. Which can lead to a connection of
people
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from various countries and
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of different ages. I am firmly convinced that
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is a positive thing that contributes to a happier society.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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