In some countries ,there are many social problems involving teenagers .this is because parents spend much of their time at work not at home .Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years,
due to
the increasing workload on
parents
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,parents
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they are unable to spend some time with their
children
,
hence
, it leads
some
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to some
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social problems for
offsprings
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. In my opinion, I agree that
children
are
felling
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feeling
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alone and can migrate into
dangerous
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a dangerous
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life
.
To begin
with,
busy
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the busy
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life
of
parents
always
keep
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keeps
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far them from their
children
which leads to loneliness. In starting days of
chlidhood
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childhood
always recommend
to enjoy
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and
company
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the company
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of others
whuch
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which
create
a
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environment for them where they can live happily and grow more but
this
burden of work
do
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does
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not give a chance to
parents
to spend some time with them ,so, they get suffer
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from mentally
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mentally
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disorder. For
instane
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instance
,
Tarre
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Tare
zameen par, is
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a bollywood
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bollywood
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Bollywood
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movie reveals that same story of
child
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a child
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who always
get
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irritate
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irritated
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as he has no one who can play and talk with him. Moving
further
, 17-18 years is
peak
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the peak
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age of
life
when
children
have to decide regarding their future and because of not highly seasoned they can take
wrong
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a wrong
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decision ,
thus
, it
create
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creates
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a big problems
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big problems
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for their
life
and
faimly
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family
and after
that
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,that
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it is very difficult for them to move back. For
instace
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instance
, Abdul kasaab, was
a
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the
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biggest terrorist and he was suffering from
same
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the same
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this
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apply
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problem
and
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he took
a
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the
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wrong step
in
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at
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17 years old ,
as a result
, hanged on
rope
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a rope
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. To recapitulate, teenagers always demand
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the guidence
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guidence
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guidance
of
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from
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their
parents
otherwise
it
create
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creates
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some big issues for them .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social problems
  • teenagers
  • parental absence
  • work-life balance
  • parental guidance
  • peer influence
  • independence
  • community support
  • government initiatives
  • tackle
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