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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph outlines the percentage of
consuming
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consumption
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 habits of
coffee
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 in Australian
cities
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.
It is clear that
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 people in those
cities
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 except Adelaide prefer visiting
to
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a cafe for their
coffee
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 in comparison to the proportion of purchasing fresh
coffee
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 shows the lowest data. We can predict the habits of consuming
coffee
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 are represented
similary
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similarly
similar
 in all areas in Australia
accroding
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according
 to the chart. In Brisbane and Adelaide, the
residences
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residents
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 are showing the same tendency that there is a big gap
approximately
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of approximately
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 20% between buying
coffee
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 beans and going to
coffee
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 shops.
However
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 from the part of instant
coffee
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 people in Adelaide slightly prefer buying it more than using
the
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apply
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coffee
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 services which is different
with
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from
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 consumers in other
cities
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. For taking
a
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apply
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coffee
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 in cafes, all of the percentages in whole
cities
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 reached over 45%,
while
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 the maximum rate of purchasing fresh
coffee
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 is under 45%. Like
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this
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 the chart is expressing that
cafe
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the cafe
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 business is significantly popular in Australia.
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