Some people believe that companies should be allowed to collect data about customers freely, while others believe this practice should be restricted. Discuss both sides of this issue.
Although
some individuals think that business
should be allowed to gather Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
information
about buyers freely, I belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
this
practice should be prohibited to respect customers
privacy.
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customers'
customer's
One
the one hand, many citizens Correct your spelling
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belive
that companies should gather shoppers' Correct your spelling
believe
information
to know about products they usually buy to receive a disccount
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discount
in
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on
Firstly
, many of these businesses tend to inquiere
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inquire
people's
phone Change preposition
about people's
number
or email Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
address
to send Fix the agreement mistake
addresses
information
about discounts or any new arrivals to the store. Secondly
, many of these individuals share sensitive information
under the belief of getting ahead other
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of other
customers
. For instance
, in the United States
it is normal that food markets Add a comma
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ask
for buyers' email to receive a Fix the infinitive
to ask
disccount
on the next purchase. Correct your spelling
discount
However
, I believe this
is a way of disrespecting customers
because asking for private information
it
is not Correct pronoun usage
apply
right
thing to do.
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the right
On the other hand
, asking for customers's
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customers'
information
should be banned to respect people's privacy and avoid them being on
risk. Change preposition
at
To begin
with, many of these buyers do not realize that their private information
is sold to others companies that many of them are scams. Moreover
, some of them are not aware that they might get in trouble by giving away this
sensitive information
. To explain further
, in the Uinited
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United
States
there are five states
that prohibited
to ask Add a missing verb
are prohibited
clients'
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for clients'
information
such
as California, Colorado, Connecticut, Utah, and Virgina
, all these Correct your spelling
Virginia
is
to Correct subject-verb agreement
are
protec
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protect
customers
' data for safety reasons. I believe, this
is a better way of treating customers
, and this
allows clients to keep their private information
safe.
In conclusion, although
many citizens support giving their private information
to some companies to obtain some benefits, this
should be regulated under the law for those who decided not to give away their information
. If this
situation is not regulated in most of
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apply
states
in the world, many more people might get contacted by scammers.Add an article
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