The charts below shows the propertion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003
The Pie Charts illustrate the amount of using various natural resources in terms of
power
production
in a particular country in two different years.
Overall
, the uses of various sources had been
changed significantly from 1985 to 2003, Unnecessary verb
apply
whereas
the dependency on oil
was a bit replaced by others. On the other hand
, a notable drop was observed in the sector of using nuclear power
in
the beginning of Change the preposition
at
21st
century.
To start with, in the middle of Correct article usage
the 21st
80s
, the two main Correct article usage
the 80s
contributes
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contributors
in
the sector of energy Change preposition
to
production
were oil
and nuclear. Whereas
oil
accumulated 52% of total production
, nuclear resources contributed 22%. Apart from
this
, the third biggest sources
was coal with 13% Fix the agreement mistake
source
conteibution
and natural gases and water were usedCorrect your spelling
contribution
8
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at 8
an
4 Correct your spelling
and
percent
respectively.
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per cent
In contrast
, in 2003, a
significant increases were noted in the proportion of using fusile fuel like coal and gases and that year they contributed 45% together. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Also
, the dependency on other natural raw materials was augmented 3
% over 18 years. Change preposition
by 3
However
, the only item that remained same
was the Correct article usage
the same
hydro
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hydropower
power
with 4%of the sum.
To conclude
, although
oil
was the prime source of power
production
in these years, several changes were noted in the way of manufacturing energy.Submitted by rishi.seehra on
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