The graph below shows the number ofshops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number ofshops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the data on retail establishments that closed their doors in 2011 and those that opened their doors in 2018.
Overall
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it is clear that
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the figures for shop closures and openings are both going through a period of rapid change and eventually levelling off at a lower total
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than openings.
In addition
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to
this
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, the
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of shops using the two lines was almost exactly the same in 2014. In the parts of opening shop, The highest
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of new stores opened in 2011 was around 8500. Following that, the
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dropped to 4000, which was twice the starting point.
Then
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, businesses grew substantially to 6200 stores in 2014, before falling back to the same level as in 2015, at 4000. In 2018, the
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decreased to 3000, which is about three times less than in the first year of observation. In terms of shutting down stores, it started with 6500 shops in the year 2011,
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went through a period of fluctuation, and
finally
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reached its highest value in 2013. The quantity fell to its lowest amount, less than 1000, in 2014, before rising to 5000 in 2016. After that, the amount fluctuated between 5000 and 5100 from 2016 to 2018.
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