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courses in music and art should be compulsory for student in high school. Do you agree or disagree with the idea?

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The phenomenon of playing musical instruments and drawing should be taught as a necessary subject in high school has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
this
 issue in question may be, I disagree that increasing more compulsory subjects for
students
. Of all the reasons why musical and artistic lessons should not be one the compulsory courses in high school, probably the most significant one is that it would be the trigger of
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 number of pupils who
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 by mental illness. To illustrate, we are living in a world that only
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 the final result like exam scores. Many
students
 are suffering from the huge amount of daily homework and the pressure from their parents.
Therefore
, many people already suffer too much stress and develop psychological problems.
As a result
, more courses create more
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stress
 for
students
. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that
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 music and art should be
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 interest, but not a tool for the competition of kids.
For instance
, playing instruments and drawing would help people relax. If
students
 had been enforced to learn music and art in order to prove they are more talented than others, they will only resent them.
Hence
, children should learn them by their will, not because it is a necessary subject. Under
this
 line of thinking, it seems to me that extra compulsory for
students
 would increase mental illness and make them hate drawing and instruments. So, I completely disagree with
this
 idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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