modern scientist need specialist in certain fields not in others. some people think that government should pay university fees for students who study subjects that are needed by society. those who choose to study less relevant subjects should not receive government funding. would the advantages of such an educational policy outweigh the disadvantages?
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students
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impact
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society
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policy suggestion.
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are
of
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students
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apply
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phenomenon could caused
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to
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on
the
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society
,
because when they joined into the Remove the comma
apply
labor
market, their skillset would be insufficient and it will Change the spelling
labour
inflated
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students
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more relevant Change preposition
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subjects
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in
labor
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subjects
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students
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the
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society
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students
in relevant subjects
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the
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did not
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neglected
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considered
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the least
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has
is still have
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case, the author suggest
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suggests
instead
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relevant subject, the government should just reallocate the proportion of funding that more leaned to the Add an article
a less
subjects
that society
more needed.Submitted by muhamadhaikal128 on
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