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Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
 have different views on whether
students
 should have Physical Education (
P
.
E
.)
classes
.
While
 many think that they should focus on academic subjects, I would argue that it is indispensable to provide
P
.
E
.
classes
 for them since physical health is crucial and it can
also
 boost our academic performance. Those who believe that
P
.
E
.
classes
 should be replaced point out that
school
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 is a place where
people
 come to learn knowledge. To be more specific,
students
 may learn about language, math, physics, history etc, which are the foundation of their future learning or careers.
People
 can find a better job if they can get higher scores in these subjects.
P
.
E
.
classes
,
however
, are less important. Only those who are gifted or interested in sports can benefit from it.
For example
, in the US,
students
 are likely to be admitted by
prestigious
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university
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 when they
at
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are at
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professional
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 athlete level.
However
, I would argue that
P
.
E
.
classes
 should be compulsory
classes
. The main reason is that despite academics
is
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 the most important part
in
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 our school life, we cannot completely ignore
students
’ health.
P
.
E
. teachers can teach
students
 some basic knowledge of different kinds of exercise, so they learn how to do training without hurting themselves.
Therefore
,
students
 could become healthier by exercising both
at
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in
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classes
 or
do
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doing
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 it after school.
Moreover
, there is scientific evidence shows that exercising regularly can boost one’s academic performance.
As a result
, not only those who want to be professional
athlete
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,
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apply
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 but
also
 those who want to achieve high marks in exams can benefit from
P
.
E
.
classes
. In conclusion,
while
 it is
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truth
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 that
people
 attend schools mainly for learning academic knowledge, I would argue that
P
.
E
.
classes
 should be included in the curriculum as it is beneficial for their health and can improve their academic performance as well.
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