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The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.
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The graphs represent the statistics of Doolittle
University
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's candidates in a year prior to and following a campaign of social
media
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ads
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 which are arranged by age range
as well as
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 the distances from housing to the campus within 100 km. On the whole, most candidates aged 18-22 years old and after running
ads
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 on social
media
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, like Instagram, the figures increased slightly for applicants who live nearby for that age range. Now, turning to the details, it can be seen that before the committees of the
university
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 run
ads
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 on social
media
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 the number of applicants who live
further
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 than 100 km from the
University
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 of Doolittle is much smaller than those who live far from the campus.
However
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, it rose significantly the next year after the campaign from about 180 to almost double the initial figure.
Whereas
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 there is not much increase for candidates who live near the
university
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. It is interesting to note that for an age range of 23 to 40 in the same graph saw little change,
moreover
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, it declined. Probably because the targeted
ads
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 were limited only to youth social
media
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 users under 23.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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