the charts below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
The pie charts compare the proportion of
time
that working adults wasted in terms of seven activities in a country in the Use synonyms
year
1958 and 2008.
Fix the agreement mistake
years
It is clear that
people spent most of their Linking Words
time
working in both 2 years, and relaxing at home witnessed the biggest gap in the period shown.
In 1958, Use synonyms
while
working and sleeping Linking Words
time
are roughly the same, with 33% and 32% respectively, people spent 19% of their Use synonyms
time
hanging out with their friends or relatives. They consumed 8% of their Use synonyms
time
at home for relaxing, followed by only 6 Use synonyms
percent
for their hobbies Change the spelling
per cent
time
, which Use synonyms
nearly
triple that of travelling to work, with 2%.
After Add a missing verb
is nearly
50-year
period, Correct article usage
a 50-year
while
the percentage of working Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
undergone
a climb to 44%, the opposite trend was true for sleeping, which fell to 25%. People in 2008 Wrong verb form
underwent
prefered
staying at home, which reached Correct your spelling
preferred
to
13% and Change preposition
apply
doubling
the figure for going out and other activities Wrong verb form
doubled
time
, at only 6% for both. There was a rise to 8% in the proportion of travelling to work Use synonyms
time
, which Use synonyms
much
higher than in 1958.Add a missing verb
is much
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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