The number of people who are leaving to foreighn countries is increasing considerably. What are the advantages and disadvantages of gping abroad ?

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Nowadays, people are

concern

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concerned

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about making money. So

that

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apply

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, more

number of

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people decided to leave their

country

to earn a sufficient income.

However

, there may be pros and cons.

This

essay will discuss

about

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the advantages and disadvantages of going abroad. There are several advantages of moving abroad.

To begin

with, earning a lot of money is easier than in our

country

. Because of

over

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employments

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employment

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and taxes,

company

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the company

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decided to pay low income for the employee. Another reason is

that

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the

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low economy of the

nation

Furthermore

, quality of

the

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apply

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education is one of the

reason

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reasons

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why most

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apply

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the

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apply

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people decided to leave their

country

. For

instances

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instance

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, once they completed their 1st degree they prepare to study for

master's

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a master's

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in a well reputed University in

other

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another country

other countries

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country

because of the quality

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education

and

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apply

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aslo

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also

after pursuing

master's

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a master's

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students can able to work for 3 years in that

nation

. These are the factors

made

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that made

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citizens

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apply

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move from their

nation

Eventhough

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Even though

there are

lot

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a lot

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of pros

however

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, there

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are

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a few disadvantages of

leave

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leaving

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their

nation

Firstly

, one of the primary

reason

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reasons

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home sickness

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homesickness

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. Once, they left their home they felt lonely because there is no one to console them.

Secondly

, they are mentally disturbed,

they

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and they

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get depressed

due to

living a lonely life. Regarding

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,weather

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weather

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whether

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there may be

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vast

difference

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differences

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so we need some time to adapt

that

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to that

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climate. These are the

demrits

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demerits

have to face if they

willing

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are willing

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to leave their home. In conclusion,

This

essay

is discussed

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the merits and demerits of moving to

a foreign countries

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foreign countries

a foreign country

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. Even though there

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are

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a lot of benefits

while

working

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apply

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abroad we need to ensure that we can

adopt

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adapt

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their

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to their

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cultures and climatic conditions.

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The number of people who are leaving to foreighn countries is increasing considerably. What are the advantages and disadvantages of gping abroad ?

Fully explain your ideas

Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

should human adapt to technology or should technology be adapted to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent? Discuss both views and give your point.