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The number of people who are leaving to foreighn countries is increasing considerably. What are the advantages and disadvantages of gping abroad ?

#people #foreighn #countries
Nowadays, people are
concern
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 about making money. So
that
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, more
number of
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people decided to leave their
country
 to earn a sufficient income.
However
, there may be pros and cons.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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the advantages and disadvantages of going abroad. There are several advantages of moving abroad.
To begin
 with, earning a lot of money is easier than in our
country
. Because of
over
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employments
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employment
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 and taxes,
company
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the company
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 decided to pay low income for the employee. Another reason is
that
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 low economy of the
nation
.
Furthermore
, quality of
the
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education is one of the
reason
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 why most
of
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the
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people decided to leave their
country
. For
instances
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, once they completed their 1st degree they prepare to study for
master's
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a master's
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 in a well reputed University in
other
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another country
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country
 because of the quality
in
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of
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 education
and
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aslo
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also
 after pursuing
master's
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a master's
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 students can able to work for 3 years in that
nation
. These are the factors
made
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 citizens
to
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move from their
nation
.
Eventhough
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Even though
 there are
lot
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 of pros
however
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, there
is
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a few disadvantages of
leave
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leaving
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 their
nation
.
Firstly
, one of the primary
reason
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reasons
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 is
home sickness
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homesickness
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. Once, they left their home they felt lonely because there is no one to console them.
Secondly
, they are mentally disturbed,
they
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and they
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 get depressed
due to
 living a lonely life. Regarding
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weather
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whether
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 there may be
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a
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vast
difference
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differences
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 so we need some time to adapt
that
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 climate. These are the
demrits
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demerits
 have to face if they
willing
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are willing
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 to leave their home. In conclusion,
This
 essay
is discussed
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 the merits and demerits of moving to
a foreign countries
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foreign countries
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. Even though there
is
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are
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 a lot of benefits
while
 working
in
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abroad we need to ensure that we can
adopt
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their
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to their
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 cultures and climatic conditions.
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