The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
This
bar chart displays the proportion of British
children
and adults consuming five portions of fruit and vegetables on a daily basis between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, the chart shows a steady increase in consumption of these
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foods in both the juvenile and adult population between 2001 and 2006, followed by a slight drop in the years after. In spite of
this
overall
increase, the
percentage
of
children
who eats five portions of greens and fruits a day is considerably lower than the
percentage
of
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adult males and significantly lower than that of adult females. A closer look at the data for
children
reveals that their
percentage
remained steady at just above 10% between 2001 and 2003, after which it increased significantly until 2007 when it peaked at approximately 25%.
This
was
then
followed by a slight drop of only a few
percentage
points in the final year. Zooming in on the percentages of adults, it can be noted that men followed a very similar trend to that of
the
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children
. The figures for males remain stable at just over 15% in the first three years of the period. After that, the percentages climbed to their highest point of more than a quarter of the population in 2006.
This
level was
also
reached in 2007, after which there was a slight decline to just slightly above 25% in 2008. The trends in female adults show a steady increase from about 20% in 2001 to
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about 35% in 2006. The numbers
then
slightly dropped again in the following two years to around 30% in 2008.
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