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The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.

The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.
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The given line chart illustrates the expenditure of
business
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, holiday and visiting
friends
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 or
relatives
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travelers
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travellers
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day
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 by
day
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 in one country between 1997 and 2017.
Overall
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, we can see that spending by international visitors was the highest between the years 2000 and 2003.
While
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business
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 travellers spent the most at the beginning of the period,
people
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 visiting
friends
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 or
relatives
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 spent the least. In 1997,
people
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 who
traveled
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travelled
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 for
business
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 to New Zealand spent an average of 260$ per
day
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,
while
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 holidaymakers spent only around 190$ and
people
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 visiting
friends
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 or
relatives
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 spent less than 120 dollars. Over the following five years, the amount of spending for all three categories rose significantly, reaching a peak of 330$, 270$ and almost 220$ respectively.
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, their expenditure suddenly fell back again between 2003 and 2005 From 2005 and 2015, the daily spending of
business
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travelers
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travellers
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 and tourists fluctuated around 200$,
whereas
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people
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 visiting
relatives
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 and
friends
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 spent approximately 60 to 80$ less per
day
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. By 2017, daily expenditure had increased again to around 250$, 210$ and 140$ respectively for vacationers,
business
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people
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 and those who visited their loved ones.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words business, friends, relatives, day, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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