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More workers work overtime and had less exercise. What is your opinion?

#workers #work #overtime #exercise
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last
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years
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 the working area has changed a lot following the society. Some think that nowadays the working class weights his job more than being physically fit; in
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essey
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 I will discuss
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 topic, highlighting problems and consequences;
however
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 we have to keep in mind that
every one
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 lives his life following his own values. I think that the digital transition has led to a revolution and transformed our society from calm to frenetic;
in addition
 inside schools, even at lower levels of education, there is a very competitive environment that makes young people under a lot of unnecessary pressure. All
this
 leads young adults, that have just entered the working life, to do everything they are required to and even more, just try to catch the attention of their bosses. But,
at the end
 of the day, is it
worth
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? In my
opinion
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 no, these youngsters usually do not care about signals that are given by their body, and,
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, sitting on a chair for eight hours a day can cause, in the long term, a lot of problems for your back and your eyes especially if you don't keep your body trained to go to the gym or out for a running session;
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this
 static situation can increase obesity ratio because we, as humans, are thought to be active all day long.
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