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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to Science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some of them believe campus students must educate whatever they want and others think they should study what
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 of future forces
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opinion
 they may choose what they can most confidentially and if they do
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opportunity
 they have. Some of them believe if they select what they can easily achieve,
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possibility
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 to get good
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 her degree in 1st class.
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opportunity
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the
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government
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select that
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without
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 their preferences,
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 they can not
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achieve
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vice
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it
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 good for future development and
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government
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disposition
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focus
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, in my
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opinion
 both sides are very important to feuter of
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 and develop a good
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full
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 I think
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the professors
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 and all the
specialist
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 made a good
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 more suitable
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 to select it
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