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The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.
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These tables depict the annual
consumption
 per person of both
beer
 and
fruit
juice
 in different
countries
. It is clear from the table that Ireland and Canada have the highest annual
consumption
 of
beer
 and
fruit
juice
 respectively.
According to
 what is shown, Ireland and Germany have the highest annual
consumption
 of
beer
of
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155 and 119
liters
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 respectively.
Although
 Austria comes next in order of
beer
 utilization, the other
countries
 consume an average of 90
liters
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 annually with Finland
consumes
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 the least at 79
liters
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.
Fruit
juice
,
on the other hand
, Canada and the United States account for
a
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significant annual
consumption
 of 52.6 and 42.8
liters
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 respectively,
while
Netherland
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 and New Zealand consume the least; hovering around 28 and 24
liters
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 respectively. The other
countries
 have nearly the same
consumption
 rate per year of the same beverage.
To sum up
, we could say that the
countries
 consume higher quantities of
beer
 than
fruit
juice
 annually.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beer, fruit, juice, countries, liters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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