Medical science has greatly lengthened the average lifespan of most people. Some think this is a positive development while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
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contemporary era, science changes every stage of
life
as it expands the growth of mankind and gives more opportunities to them. As in the medical line scientific research evolved a significant approach to human
life
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others opposed the statement. I believe that it is a beneficial development in
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few years to maintain the physics run longer. First and foremost, advance in technology changes the medical sector the most.
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is every solution
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any particular disease which is
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economic development for the nations .
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can live a better
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major diseases like cancer, aids and other dangerous diseases which is harmful
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humans that balanced with
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medicinal health. For , example,
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it is considered that
life
expectancy will be 120 years of humans with the help of medical treatment.
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, it is a positive
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for
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generation to maintain their health more
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than the past generations for their
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On the other hand
, there are some negative aspects of increased lifespan.
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, it is difficult for
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to provide medicines for
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old age.
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number of
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population
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more treatment and
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from nurses so
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for
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. For, instance, authority focus more on
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health rather than
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individual . As result,
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generation struggles more with
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pollution of society
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relevant
diseases. In conclusion,medical science gives a long wing to
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life
expectancy which is beneficial for society old ages live more safely, securely and significantly .
However
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pollution of density.
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