Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Today, there are many
people
who have problems with their
health
tend
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and tend
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to
use
medicines
and treatments without going to
hospital
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. In my opinion,
this
trend is a negative development that
people
should not follow. There are many reasons that
people
should visit their doctor and limit
use
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the use
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of unknown
drugs
and
treatment
.
Firstly
,
people
may
use
the wrong
medicines
and
treatment
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treatments
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. In the modern and technological society,
people
can easily look up information on the Internet and there is so much information that they can control and understand.
Therefore
, they may choose
wrong
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the wrong
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drugs
and treatments that can not only have a negative impact on their
health
but
also
make the disease worse.
Secondly
, many
people
can easily be taken advantage of and defrauded. There are a lot of scammers who sell poor quality, ineffective and non-healing
drugs
. It is easy for patients to trust the advertisements of these
people
and buy
drugs
of unknown origin leading to adverse
health
effects.
Moreover
,
people
who lack knowledge and information can
use
drugs
and
treatment
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treatments
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with
wrong
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the wrong
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dosage and method.
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, using more than the prescribed dose will lead to side effects of the drug, reduce the effectiveness of the drug and adversely affect
health
. In conclusion, many sick
people
choose to
use
drugs
and
medicines
and do not visit their doctor. Personally, I think
this
is a negative issue that has a bad effect on
patient's
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patients'
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health
because they may
use
wrong
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the wrong
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medicines
and
treatment
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treatments
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, be tricked into buying
poor quality
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poor-quality
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drugs
and
use
poison with
wrong
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the wrong
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dosage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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