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In many countries, not enough students study science subjects. What are the causes? What will be the effect on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Our modern society is dependent on education to provide new knowledge, technologies and solutions to pressing world problems. Somehow, most nations have low numbers of students studying
science
.
This
 is because some admission finds it irrelevant and uninteresting, which may give a huge impact on society in the future since
this
 brings great innovation to make our
life
 easier. Nowadays, most enlistment study the subject that they are passionate about and interest them, and set aside the others like studying
science
 which they find not interesting.
For example
, one student studying Bussiness Management because his parents and family are in the world of business, which gives him interest and passion for managing a company ,Meanwhile he would rather choose to study business than
science
, sometimes the people around them influence their choices like their parents because they will be the successor and they have no choice but to follow their elders.
While
science
 is very important to human
life
, if there will be not enough professionals in
this
 subject area in the future, there will be limited improvements, inventions and technologies,
for instance
 in medical
science
, every now and
then
 new diseases and viruses are spreading worldwide, so human needs new invented medicine for the specific disease, that's why more scientist is needed.
Moreover
, in ,agriculture all the inventions are because of learning, vehicles, phones, computers and other more that make human
life
 easier. All of these innovations need people who studied
science
 for
further
 development and to continue the stability of
science
. In conclusion, observing the use and importance of
science
, we can say that it has a vast use in human
life
, so students need to be more informed about the benefits of learning and be more environmentally and insightful citizens.
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