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it is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. however, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician

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It is often argued that some public have special abilities in a particular field
such
 as sport or music, whilst others disagree and think any individual can be reached considerable success as an athlete or artist. In my point of view, everyone can achieve his goal by hardworking but I strongly believe that some
indivisuals
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individuals
 have higher talent and ability in a particular field. The following essay contains my justifications to support my point of view. In
this
 ever-changing world, many
people
 are known as successful athletes or artists and they follow a strict daily routine and have a special brain structure and unique ability
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 helps them be the diligent character, on the one ,hand mentioned
people
 prove themselves by practising every single day, In
fact
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in addition
 to having passion in their career they try hard every day and are a very successful
person
 in their jobs.
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 my cousin is very professional in kickboxing and I see his everyday practice to be a very strong
person
 among his classmates.
On the other hand
, there are some other
people
 who gain mastery through hard work
while
 they haven’t any special talent and just follow their
principals
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 or rules in their career. In
fact
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that is
 a very significant option for them to study at a good university or company because if they could not select the proper ones, they couldn’t achieve any special goal in their life.
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 I am an ordinary
person
 which should work in a very special society and if not, I can’t be a very useful
person
 in that career or job. In conclusion, following a strict daily routine can help everyone gain mastery but we should believe that some
people
 have a high level of talent that leads to very special happenings in the whole world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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