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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, and what measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

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There was a period of time when fresh water was a limited resource affecting some individuals but today is a major problem which turns global affecting the whole population. The demand on consuming fresh water has increased related to the growth of the population on earth. It is human's duty to take care of
this
 resource and have responsibility for it, reducing their use in case needed
such
 as taking short showers. As it was mentioned before, the population on earth has been growing fast and lead to an unconvinced usage of the earth's natural
resources
 which have begun to disappear,
such
 as glaciers in South America as a source of mineral water. To
this
 complication, it can add the global warming situation in order to the inappropriate use of natural
resources
, which generates a huge problem in our ecosystem
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. Even though humans need sources provided by nature in a wrong way and do not have a conscience of the consequences that their acts could have on the planet or even on themselves, I consider that the first step to take should be thinking about which of these problems could lead into the future if humans do not use them properly.
Moreover
, I believe that government institutions should help people by showing through different ways which problems humanity could face and the side effects of not using
resources
 carefully
also
 asking for help from the community on taking short showers could
also
 be a positive side of
this
 problem.
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 is the actual civilization
that is
 in charge of taking care of the
resources
 for future generations and they are who should think about the consequences their action could have. Taking good decisions today could lead to a better place for tomorrow's new generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fresh water scarcity
  • limited resource
  • worldwide demand
  • water conservation
  • sustainable infrastructure
  • desalination
  • water recycling
  • industrialization
  • agriculture irrigation
  • population growth
  • climate change
  • industrial regulation
  • water management
  • policy implementation
  • water-efficient appliances
  • public awareness campaigns
  • rationing of water
  • international treaties
  • conservation measures
  • groundwater depletion
  • ecosystem preservation
  • sustainability practices
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