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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think it is important for children to go to school. Discuss both the advantages of each method and give your own opinion

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In the modern era, teaching at
home
 became popular. Some people believe that teaching at
home
 cannot substitute
the
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education in
school
whereas
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other
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another
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 side with
the
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that
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 teaching at
home
much
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effective
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 rather than in education organizations. In
this
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 I will discuss both
of
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views and draw my own opinion.
To begin
 with,
effectiveness
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 of teaching at
home
considered
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as
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the best way to learn subjects. Children at
school
 have a plethora of distractions to be well-educated. Take Kazakh pupils as an example, the majority of them study in
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school
 using their phones, gadgets and headphones
while
teacher
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conduct
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 the process of studying and
this
 fact doesn’t care him or her.
Secondly
, students lose their main purposes of study. What I mean by saying
this
 is that children at
school
studying
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 how to be good-rated rather than how to perceive useful knowledge.
As a result
, society obtains just an
employee
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employees
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 with good grades at
school
instead
 of
high-qualified
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a high-qualified
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worker
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workers
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. Turning to the other side of
this
 is that children studying at
school
 with other pupils like him or
her
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 can learn not only knowledge which gives education system but
take
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 personal and social skills
such
 as communicativeness and verbal skills which
really
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are really
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 important in growing with the world of communication.
To sum up
, being high-qualified and
awareness
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 of what you learn and
knowing
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 what you want in the future overweight any
the
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personal skills. I strongly support
home
-teaching
more
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being more
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 beneficial still than
take
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 knowledge at
school
. Invest money and time
to
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productiveness
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and
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wisely.
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